Wednesday, March 23, 2011

The Tweet Pals 1 students in Montreal + the Haiku, the summary and the mini-story!

Tweet Pals 1 in Montreal have been practicing their English and the use of Twitter. They have tried their hand at the Haiku, the summary and the mini-story!

Using the comment form below:

  • Tweet Pals 1 can elaborate on the tweets they wrote (in English)
  • Tweet Pals 2 (Quebec City) can comment upon the tweets (in English) and can correct the tweets (in French)
  • Twitosphère 1 (Vancouver), Twitosphère 2 (Toronto) and Twitosphère 3 (Saint-Boniface) can comment upon the tweets (in French) and can correct the tweets (in English)

The mini-poem: the Haiku

LaaayyzzyBoy Haïku I'm a bird who wants to fly away but to make that dream come true, I have to prepare my self and clean up the road.

Mikee2704 Haiku: It took me one second to notice you, a minute to love you, but it would take the eternity to forget you.

shashou67 haïku : God can love for lenght but human can just love for a moment

KuroHoshi3107 Snow crying Sun smiling Students tweeting Me singing

mihullers air:gentle,cold...the earth was breathing and covered with snow...

futureboatdrive The snow is felted... the green putted out the white... my hearth feel this frozen breath forever... i want the winter back.

roufibella the color of the sky makes me want to fly like a bird in the sky the trees are so green like a parade in the other world make me stunned

samyy_o I would like that I just need to raise my hands and get the moon easily for keep it like if it's an important gift.

HuangDHuang Leaves start changing colour And they fall down one by one As day passes by more and more gather Soon all will disapear

YoussefBene Haiku : If I could just forget Things you did to me The person I thought you were Maybe I'd live better

OtakuSignal Small lily She watches every single of our movements Dancehall under the red moon Bitter farewells

coolstorybraaah "Cats", said the Chinese surgeon, While beautiful gifts of nature, Are tantalizing meals And after surgery is done, I must brush my theeth.

tranemil Lonely winter night, Snow glitters in the moonlight, It lightens me up.

ameni_164_tn I walk on the sand the heat is scorching the sea beyond me smiling birds flying all day summer is finally back

GuerlensRF HAIKU. I like turkey It's so Juicy Like an orange Juice When I eat turkey The sun raise to the sky Cold becomes Hot I'm in love with turkey

Summary or minuscule writing

misachan12 A twelve year old girl gets a journal and learns about a girl named Sara. On her birthday, she decided to honor Sara by telling her story.

Mikee2704 Summary: It's the story of Bruno Hamel, he had a good life until his daughter got killed. Basicly, he kidnaps the assassin and tortures him.

benjileroi it's the story of a guy who killed his family because some voices telling him. I'm sad.

sarareine sur la point des piends,it is an immigrante girl in canada,she likes to dance ,one day the gisl he falls in love with the boy in this class

shawtyyheart "Chinese letters"is a sad love story between two lovers.The novel brings together letters written about the impossible love seperating them.

KuroHoshi3107 My book tells a story about a child sold by her parents to a district of slavery. To escape the miserable life in Japan she'll become Geisha

roufibella it's comic strip of a rich person who has ole that he wants except happiness so he understand that money does not make happiness

futureboatdrive The book speaks about the life of a student and a joker during the middle-age in France. In this book, we learned a lot of secret from past.

Kaze1314 my book is <là où la mer commence>(where the sea begins) It talk about the story of beauty and beast. but, no magic. it likely real life.

coolstorybraaah L'amant : A poor French was deeply in love with a rich Chinese man. Despite their difference in society, their love was inseperabe.

YoussefBene Summary:Michael Haller, best lawyer ? The main character on the Lincoln Lawyer had to defend a psychopath but he managed to put him in jail.

samyy_o I'm reading a book collection. The title of this is Skully Fourbery.
samyy_o It's about skeleton detective who resolved mysteries and arrested bad persons with his accomplice.

ameni_164_tn Cinderella suffered all her life with her stepmother. Thanks to the fairy, she met the prince at a ball and he decided to marry her.

Dydy_F Summary:La lettre écarlate;A women is juged because she is pregnant with an other man than her husband.And the jury decided to punish.

simplicityQ LE JOUEUR : A slave played at the casino and became a richman. He won the money for a girl that he try to get over and over again .

OtakuSignal "The Nazi and the Barber" tells the story of a man who participated to the holocaust of WWII. After the war, the man decides to become jew.

amirkrayem ''Le visiteur du soir'' is a detective story. Throughout the novel, the police tried to trap the person who stole a painting from a museum.

GuerlensRF Le meurtrier sans visage. An old man was assassinated and a detective in charge a case to search for the criminals who left no traces

shootop A man finds his daughter dead body in front of her school. To get revenge, the man kidnapped the murderer and tortured him for seven days.

abi2828 Maidservant was mistreated by her landlord. Whit time, they fell in love. Finally, they got married and had many children.

LaaayyzzyBoy It's the story of a cowboy who lost his parents when he was younger than he pasts his entire life to find the murderer.

Meltwit011 Anna decides to live in New York,she falls in love with an American but their love was impossible and forbidden because the both was married

ILuvCereal17 Good guys don't always win like the Emperor and his Imperium of Man. It was his fall from grace and gave place to chaos and disorder.

Unitedspace25 it`s the story of people who watch crisis and probleme, they are worried and complain and what they are going to do about it ... nothing

jane_172 the story is about a guy and his friends. One day, they found a baby. They decide to take the baby and bring her to the police.

Djboss23 The story is about a old man tried to find a secret to rescue his wife he went east,destroyed everybody tried to stop him and day he find it

The mini-story in 140 characters

futureboatdrive During my last trip on the sea, she asked me to follow her. Her beautiful voice attracted me and his sadness took my life for the eternity.

ILuvCereal17 The beautiful landscapes represents our fantastic escape. Our lush green forests, our national parks being one of the bests. I wonder ...
ILuvCereal17 Once this lone dog was wandering in the streets, then a very kind man found him and sheltered it. The dog was a demon and murdered the man.

Mikee2704 Short story: A woman got hit by a car at 100km/h and she end up with zero injuries.
Mikee2704 Domestic violence is something that can be physical,verbal, economic or else and it usually happens at home, in a couple or between family.

misachan12 A woman meets by accident a man.They fall at first sight in love.After a few year,the woman leave her husband and gets married with the man.
misachan12 He never realized that she was sick He caused her pain without knowing When he finally came around It was already to late

n3fr3t93 You know the night is dray without you.I can't sleep, mornings don't show the light. I'm crying here because I love you so much.
n3fr3t93 He saw a beautiful girl and he fail in love. he bought flowers, necklace and ring but she didin't won this guy and Louis kill himself.

Unitedspace25 It`s everything but I can`t describe It`s coming and going but I don`t understand are they something I wish I could see it more clearly
Unitedspace25 A boy named Jacob lost his older brother after that met his uncle and found him in another world and discovers he is the chosen one

roufibella a mouse go out of her hole without noise she quickly crossed the kichen to find somthing to nourish her child but the cat eat her

shootop A teenager gets lost in the woods, he finds a temple of the shogun era. A priest asks him to seat near the coffin. The coffin swallow him.
shootop The wind blows, the six path of the dream opens, my soul is freed from the darkness and the world open to me. I reborn again as a new being.

mihullers she plays the piano softly...she fails and her master shout her,she was barely breathing,she decides to continue,he apologizes she smiles.
mihullers anyone sees Claire:a girl was almost invisible, when she finally became an invisible person, someone was able to see her..and maybe,love her

Kaze1314 Who really knows love? Don't say it's your heart Because nobody knows love It's only the time that knows How love is important.
Kaze1314 I have no money in my wallet, but I'm hungry. Then I find 5$ on the street, so I go to eat McDonald's. And now I'm feeling better.

shawtyyheart I hate you as much as i dislike eating cheese. But i don' t know why my heart can' t stop beating... everytime i see your beautiful smile.<3
shawtyyheart I had been deeply in love with him seen kindergarten. However, he didn't know. In the end, I found out that I was only a sister to him. </3

abi2828 Death comes around and goes around She has no firends but a lot of enemies She loves everyone but no body cares about her :)
abi2828 A student fell in love with his teacher. She fell in love too and they got married. They had babies but one died. Emilie left her husband.

LaaayyzzyBoy A women has been hit by a car. The emergency brought her to the hospital. When she finally arrived there, she died a few minutes after.

KuroHoshi3107 A lost kitten with his ball of wool suddenly fell from a cliff He has to take the wool to hang on a tree root Kitten's safe, ball's dead :(

sarareine one night i went with my friends a feast of culture.i see the boy, when i talk with him a descovered is my friend on facbook

coolstorybraaah Japan has been working on a new technology :going to the beach without physical work.Their idea was successful and the beach came to people.
coolstorybraaah @HuangDHuang I can almost see it, that dream I am dreaming \

Meltwit011 Life is a hard thing.Perhaps it's a simple thing.You choose how it is ? Living is a gift.Live your life to the fullest.But stay the smartest
Meltwit011 I woke up one morning, I discovered that he was not by my side. Like all the man, he betrayed me. So, I went to his house and I killed him.
Meltwit011 @conniezhouuu I don't have any favorite singer ... I listen differents styles and I love all singers I listen. And about you ?

HuangDHuang When I entered the room, I felt as if my heart had stopped beating, and when I saw her face, I felt as if I've been brought back to life.

samyy_o I was moved back and talked to my friends. I fell on a small snow mountain. My friend helped me to stand up and I almost fell on him too.

YoussefBene Short story :It was supposed to be a beautiful day. Kids playing and parents resting.But something happened. An earthquake ruined everything

alexzarzour The first time she said "I love you". The first time she got her first kiss. The first time she said "I miss you".
alexzarzour A young man tried to find a girl,that deserved to be loved and to fall in love. The only girl for him, and that girl was, my girlfriend.
alexzarzour The story is about Antoine. Antoine lived alone all his life And someday he won a lot of money and now he's the most popular guy

dalhiaaihlad From morning till evening on holiday. I am looking for something to do, because the vacations bores me.
dalhiaaihlad I went to see my friend. We went to eat. He choked while eating. I took him to hospital. I lost a good friend.
dalhiaaihlad His wife was kidnapped and killed. David is accused of being the culprit. It will seek by all means to prove the opposite of these word.

tranemil They were childhood friends that drifted apart, he never told her his feelings. It's too late, now.
tranemil The daughter of Bruno was raped and murdered, he kidnaps her killer. He seeks revenge.

khadieJunita A man who was unfaithful, always say that he is at a meeting. One day, his wife followed him and saw him with another woman. She divored.
khadieJunita I liked when you rocked me I liked when you played with me I liked when you loved me I will always love you mom.

Dydy_F My name is Felicia I did my biggest fight with Cancer.Cancer controled my body.And it sent me in paradise.I'm at peace and I won this fight.

ameni_164_tn arnold wants to marry Lina but his parents disagree. He couldn't imagine his life without her, then he commits suicide by drinking poison.

Djboss23 Naruto: this a ninja guy he has a dream to become the best chief of village of the world naruto is his name
Djboss23 The first time I saw this girl i said it's real The second time I saw this girl i said i love her The third time I saw this girl got married

GhitaElidrissi They ask me about love I say violence They tell me about peace Read this sentence Who talks about war They say I'm crazy I'm only heartless
GhitaElidrissi With a big smile, she wakes up; she feels bad, very bad and she starts to cry. Nobody understands her but she was a victim of a bad rape.
GhitaElidrissi When a prince is in love with a woman of honour we said that it's an impossible love. Yet it happened in the Middle Ages, a love until death

simplicityQ Today, I woke up and my bottle of water was empty.I raged and went to the store to get a new bottle.Unfortunately, they were out of stock.

DreamJeny Saw him in youtube, i liked his music. I started to learn and fall in love with his songs, so i became his fan!
DreamJeny The story is about the spook's apprentice. The apprentice learned and fought hard to become the best of all spooks.

amirkrayem The Sun; A big source of energy that illuminates the world; Essential for life; Makes people cheerful; Eliminates darkness and depression.
amirkrayem Bob was walking near a sea. He saw a man who was wearing a luxurious watch and was drowning ! Instead of helping him, Bob stole his watch.

GuerlensRF At 26th december I always cook turkey. My mother and i made the dish and my brothers did the housework. My father slept until that

OtakuSignal Once upon a time, there was a boy. This young man saved the kingdom when he was still 9. Ever since, he is known as the savior of Menbel.

mysweetcherry Cherish your dreams And make them come true Nothing is impossible Believing is the key
mysweetcherry From the first moment they saw each other, they felt a desire and before they knew it, they fell in love. A story about a forbidden love.

jane_172 Me and you for ever. Maybe I am not perfect but I am not the worst. I know what I feel for you and I know you feel the same too
jane_172 One day a guy go out with his car and he accidentally struck a woman. She was at the hospital and he visited her and became good friends

BiigJoo Penner with Kings, sounds like good playoffs for me !

Remember when you write a comment to use the #hashtag to identify yourself and the @username to identify the person whose tweet you are commenting. Thank-you!

106 comments:

  1. #cuckoografik @Mikee2704 Very good summary on the theme of domestic violence. How violence does not always take the form of physical abuse. You managed to say quite a lot in one tweet!

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  2. @BiigJoo Sounds like you are a big hockey fan. Is Dustin Penner your favourite player? Try putting a URL in your next tweet to give the user more information. You can shorten the link with http://bit.ly Another hockey fan - @qsevel in Saint-Boniface - tweeted that his favourite site is the NHL: http://bit.ly/fmcy

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  3. #VivianCheung @Mikee2704 "Domestic violence is something that can be physical,verbal, economic or else and it usually happens at home, in a couple or between family." should be "Domestic violence is something that can be physical, verbal or economic and it usually happens at home, in a couple or between family." The "or else" is not needed.

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  4. #VivianCheung @Meltwit011 J'aime tous les genres de musique aussi!

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  5. #twitosphere3 @simplicityQ En anglais richman est deux mots. rich man

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  6. #sbassan93 @OtakuSignal "The Nazi and the Barber" tells the story of a man who participated to the holocaust of WWII. After the war, the man decides to become jew. In this tweet, we would say "The Nazi and the Barber" tells the story of a man who participated in the holocaust of WWII. After the war, the man decides to become Jewish. "participated to the" will become "participated in the" and "decides to become jew" will become "decides to become Jewish".

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  7. @futureboatdrive

    Tu écris bien en anglais mais n'oublie pas ton «i». Le I qui répresente je est toujours majuscule en anglais

    #Apankumu

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  8. @HuangDHuang

    Plutôt de dire «As day passes» on dit « As days pass»

    #Apankumu

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  9. #cuckoografik @TweetPals1 TIP: When another student helps you to correct your tweet, rewrite it and send out another tweet. Practice makes perfect!

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  10. #sophiale @GuerlensRF "At 26th december I always cook turkey. My mother and i made the dish and my brothers did the housework. My father slept until that" should be: "On December 26, I always cook a turkey. My mother and I made the dish and my brothers did the housework, while my father slept."

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  11. #VivianCheung @Dydy_F "My name is Felicia I did my biggest fight with Cancer.Cancer controled my body.And it sent me in paradise.I'm at peace and I won this fight." It should be "My name is Felicia and I had my biggest fight with cancer. Cancer controlled my body and it sent me to paradise. I'm at peace and I won this fight."

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  12. @futureboatdrive J'aime l'hiver aussi! Je manque l'hiver ):

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  13. #conniezhouuu @Meltwit011 "I don't have any favorite singer ... I listen differents styles and I love all singers I listen. And about you ?" It should be "I don't have a favourite singer. I listen to different styles and I love all the singers that I listen to."

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  14. #sbassan93 @n3fr3t93 "He saw a beautiful girl and he fail in love. he bought flowers, necklace and ring but she didin't won this guy and Louis kill himself." In this tweet, we would say,"He saw a beautiful girl and he fell in love. He bought her flowers, a necklace and a ring but she didn't want him and Louis killed himself."

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  15. #echen94 @jane_172 "One day a guy go out with his car" should be "One day a guy went out in his car" je ne pense pas que ce garcon n'était pas dans sa voiture oui?

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  16. #caballo0o @mysweetcherry "Cherish your dreams And make them come true Nothing is impossible Believing is the key."
    It should be "Cherish your dreams and make them come true. Nothing is impossible. Believing is the key." Punctuation is needed.

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  17. @n3fr3t93 Non! il aurait trouver une autre fille~ #Sisisisisisi8D

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  18. #beckyluo

    @Djboss23 The story is about a old man tried to find a secret to rescue his wife he went east,destroyed everybody tried to stop him and day he find it

    Correction:
    @Djboss23 The story is about an old man who tried to find a secret to rescue his wife. He went east, destroyed everybody who tried to stop him and one day he found it.

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  19. #caballo0o @tranemil "They were childhood friends that drifted apart, he never told her his feelings. It's too late, now."
    It should be "they were childhood friends that drifted apart. He never told her his feelings. It's too late now."

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  20. @futureboatdrive J'aime l'hiver aussi! Je manque l'hiver ): #Sisisisisisi8D

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  21. #conniezhouuu @simplicityQ "Today, I woke up and my bottle of water was empty.I raged and went to the store to get a new bottle.Unfortunately, they were out of stock." Je bois du l'eau touts les temps aussi! Mais selon moi, je voudrais boire du jus!

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  22. #lasophiale @Kaze1314 qui est une bonne histoire! J'aime manger le mcdonalds :)

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  23. #VivianCheung @shootop J'aime votre histoire beaucoup!

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  24. @OtakuSignal #mullover_elide
    If the boy is still known today, you could say "Ever since he has been known..." or, if he is no longer known you could say "Afterwards he was known..."

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  25. #phammt

    @LaaayyzzyBoy It's the story of a cowboy who lost his parents when he was younger than he pasts his entire life to find the murderer.

    Correction
    LaaayyzzyBoy It's the story of a cowboy who lost his parents when he was younger. THEN he SPENT his entire life FINDING the murderer.

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  26. #VivianCheung @mysweetcherry Je suis d'accord avec votre histoire!

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  27. #lasophiale @shootop C'est très triste! :(

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  28. #sbassan93 @ameni_164_tn "arnold wants to marry Lina but his parents disagree. He couldn't imagine his life without her, then he commits suicide by drinking poison. Cet histoire a un dénouement très malheureux.

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  29. #nixonkwok @mihullers air:gentle,cold...the earth was breathing and covered with snow...

    Ton haiku est très calmant!

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  30. #VivianCheung @GhitaElidrissi C'est une histoire très triste.

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  31. @amirkrayem "Bob was walking near a sea. He saw a man who was wearing a luxurious watch and was drowning ! Instead of helping him, Bob stole his watch." un homme très mauvais .\ _ /. il a besoin d'un thérapeute! #Sisisisisisi8D

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  32. @GuerlensRF #AndrewChen123 In your haiku where you mention the orange juice, its instead of saying "an orange juice," we usually say either "a cup of orange orange juice" or just "orange juice" since you cannot "count" juice whereas you can count "cups of juice". Hope that actually made some sense.

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  33. #ajaniaaa @shootop "A man finds his daughter dead body in front of her school. To get revenge, the man kidnapped the murderer and tortured him for seven days." It should actually be "A man found his daughter's dead body in front of her school. To get revenge, the man kidnapped the murderer and tortured him for seven days." "Finds" becomes "found" because the rest of the sentence is in past tense. "daughter" becomes "daughter's"

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  34. #e_rnestli @samyy_o "I was moved back and talked to my friends." should be "I moved back while talking to my friends." This is because you are moving back while talking to your friends. "My friend helped me to stand up and I almost fell on him too." should be "My friend helped me stand up and I almost fell on him too. "To" is not needed.

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  35. #tdonggg @YoussefBene j'aime ton haiku. C'est très fort!

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  36. #echen94 @amirkrayem "Bob was walking near a sea. He saw a man who was wearing a luxurious watch and was drowning ! Instead of helping him, Bob stole his watch." Oh non, Bob est un mechant garcon. Mais, est-ce que Bob a sauvé l'homme puis volé la montre? ou ext-ce que Bob a sauté dans la mer et puis, a volé la montre?

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  37. #i_heartfrench @Mikee2704 "Short story: A woman got hit by a car at 100km/h and she end up with zero injuries."

    I think it should be: "A woman got hit by a car going at 100km/h but she ended up with zero injuries."

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  38. #nixonkwok @mihullers air:gentle,cold...the earth was breathing and covered with snow...

    Ton haiku est très calmant.

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  39. #conniezhouuu @mysweetcherry "From the first moment they saw each other, they felt a desire and before they knew it, they fell in love. A story about a forbidden love." C'est romantique! Une bonne histoire!

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  40. #regeenie619 @GuerlensRF HAIKU. I like turkey It's so Juicy Like an orange Juice When I eat turkey The sun raise to the sky Cold becomes Hot I'm in love with turkey. It should be "I like turkey/It's so juicy like orange juice//When I eat turkey/ The sun rise to the sky/ Cold becomes hot/ I'm in love with turkey.

    Good Job!!! :)

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  41. #caballo0o @Meltwit011 "Anna decides to live in New York,she falls in love with an American but their love was impossible and forbidden because the both was married."
    It should be "Anna decides to live in New York. she falls in love with an American. Their love is impossible and forbidden because they are both married.

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  42. #i_heartfrench @tranemil

    J'adore ton haiku:

    "Lonely winter night, Snow glitters in the moonlight, It lightens me up."

    C'est très incroyable!

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  43. #jennyychan @samyy_o "It's about skeleton detective who resolved mysteries and arrested bad persons with his accomplice." Should be " It's about a skeleton detective who resolves mysteries and arrests bad people with his accomplice."

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  44. #tdonggg

    @GuerlensRF At 26th december I always cook turkey. My mother and i made the dish and my brothers did the housework. My father slept until that

    correction:
    @GuerlensRF On December 26th, we always cook turkey. My mother and I made the dish and my brothers did the housework. My father slept until that

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  45. #conniezhouuu @DreamJeny "Saw him in youtube, i liked his music. I started to learn and fall in love with his songs, so i became his fan!" C'est Justin Bieber? J'aime les chansons aussi!

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  46. #andrewchen123 @simplicityQ C'est dommage! Tu n'as pas d'eau. =/

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  47. #nixonkwok @HuangDHuang Leaves start changing colour And they fall down one by one As day passes by more and more gather Soon all will disapear

    Tu as raison!

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  48. #i_heartfrench @shootop "A man finds his daughter dead body in front of her school. To get revenge, the man kidnapped the murderer and tortured him for seven days."

    Bonne histoire! C'est très effroyable.

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  49. #tdonggg

    @mysweetcherry Cherish your dreams And make them come true Nothing is impossible Believing is the key

    D'accord!

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  50. #echen94 @roufibella "a mouse go out of her hole without noise she quickly crossed the kichen to find somthing to nourish her child but the cat eat her" should be "a mouse went out...". "without noise" can be "silently". "the cat ate her", passé composé. Pauvre souris! et l'enfant de la souris? il est mort?

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  51. #sbassan93 @abi2828 "Maidservant was mistreated by her landlord. Whit time, they fell in love. Finally, they got married and had many children." Cet histoire a un dénouement très heureux pour la famille.

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  52. @amirkrayem #mullover_elide
    Bob was walking near a sea. He saw a man who was wearing a luxurious watch and was drowning ! Instead of helping him, Bob stole his watch.
    Jajajaja, Cette histoire est drôle. Je pense qu'il nous enseigne une leçon importante. Pas aller à la plage!

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  53. #ajaniaaa @jane_172 "the story is about a guy and his friends. One day, they found a baby. They decide to take the baby and bring her to the police." It should be "The story is about a guy and his friends. One day, they found a baby. They decided to take the baby to the police." You should use past tense for the whole sentence and "and bring her" is not needed.

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  54. #e_rnestli @jane_172 C'est très romantique! Je l'aime.

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  55. #echen94 @alex alexzarzour A young man tried to find a girl,that deserved to be loved and to fall in love. The only girl for him, and that girl was, my girlfriend.
    est-ce que Ce garcon et vous? ou un autre garcon qui a volé sa petite amie?

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  56. #i_heartfrench @ILuvCereal17 "Once this lone dog was wandering in the streets, then a very kind man found him and sheltered it. The dog was a demon and murdered the man."

    Le fin est très imprévu!

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  57. #tdonggg

    @GuerlensRF HAIKU. I like turkey It's so Juicy Like an orange Juice When I eat turkey The sun raise to the sky Cold becomes Hot I'm in love with turkey

    j'aime manger de la dinde aussi!

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  58. @otakusignal #andrewchen3 Ton livre c'est très interressant!

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  59. #lasophiale @ameni_164_tn J'adore l'été!

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  60. @amirkrayem #mullover_elide
    "The Sun; A big source of energy that illuminates the world; Essential for life; Makes people cheerful; Eliminates darkness and depression."
    Oui, t'as raison. mais c'est aussi vrai que plus des gens se tuent au printemps

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  61. @Meltwit011 "I don't have any favorite singer ... I listen differents styles and I love all singers I listen. And about you ?" Hey (: just some simple corrections... in using "any" it means that the thing you're talking about is plural, so the sentence should instead be "I don't have any favorite singerS" with the added "s". Another like mistake in "I listen differents". Here, the "s" at the end of different is not needed and a "to" should be added after listen because we say "listen TO". It's similar to how in french you'd say "téléphoner à ..." while in english we just simply say "telephone...". Nothing major d; It's just that languages have some weird rules lol. Hope this helps (: #Sisisisisisi8D

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  62. #sbassan93 @ameni_164_tn "I walk on the sand the heat is scorching the sea beyond me smiling birds flying all day summer is finally back." C'est un beau haiku à propos de l'été.

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  63. #echen94 @samyy_o "It's about skeleton detective who resolved mysteries and arrested bad persons with his accomplice." Ah! Skulduggery Pleasant et Valkyrie Cain! Avez vous lu Mortal Coil? Pauvre Tanith Low...

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  64. #e_rnestli @shawtyyheart Si j'étais tu, je serais très triste. :(

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  65. #cuckoografik Good job to all the students from the Tweet Pals 1 class! A few suggestions…

    @futureboatdrive Nice tweet! Here are a few suggestions:
    “The snow is (melted) / green (replaces) white / my (heart feels) this frozen breath forever / I want the winter back.” (“Hearth” means “foyer” in French. I think you meant heart?) Very poetic. Keep tweeting!

    @samyy_o Nice tweet! Here are a few suggestions:
    I would like that I just need to raise my hands (to grab) the moon (so that I can) keep it (as I would keep) an important gift.”
    Because you say “just need” it already implies that it is easy so you don’t need to put “easily”. Is this what you wanted to say? Keep tweeting!

    @HuangDHuang Poetic tweet! Here are a few suggestions:
    “Leaves start changing colour / And they fall down one by one / As (the) day passes by /more and more gather / Soon all will (disappear)” Keep tweeting!

    @OtakuSignal Lovely tweet! Just a little word missing:
    “Small lily / She watches every single (one) of our movements / Dancehall under the red moon / Bitter farewells” Keep tweeting!

    @coolstorybraaah Like the dark humour! Just a small spelling mistakes:
    “ "Cats", said the Chinese surgeon, While beautiful gifts of nature, Are tantalizing meals And after surgery is done, I must brush my (teeth).”

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  66. #cuckoografik Nice job on the summaries! Just a few suggestions:

    @KuroHoshi3107 “My book tells (the) story about a child sold by her parents (into) slavery. To escape the miserable life in Japan she'll become (a) Geisha” (The expression “sold into slavery” might be better than “District of slavery”?)

    @roufibella “(It’s) a comic strip of a rich person who has (all) that he wants except happiness so he understand that money does not make happiness”.

    @futureboatdrive “The book (is) about the life of a student and a joker during the middle-age in France. In this book, we learned a lot (about secrets) from (the) past.” (Does the book really speak? We do use the figure of expression “ the book talks about” though.)

    @Kaze1314 “(My) book is (where the sea begins). It (is) about the story of Beauty and (the) Beast. But, no magic. (It is like) real life.”

    @coolstorybraaah “L'amant: A poor French (woman) was deeply in love with a rich Chinese man. Despite their difference in society, their love was (inseparable).” (Do you mean to say that their union was indestructible or undividable?)

    @Dydy_F “Summary: La lettre écarlate; A women is (judged) because she is pregnant (by a) man (other) than her husband. (The) jury (decides) to punish (her).”

    @GuerlensRF “Le meurtrier sans visage. An old man was assassinated and a detective in charge (of the) case (has) to search for the criminals who (have) left no traces.”

    @shootop “A man finds his (daughter’s) dead body in front of her school. To get revenge, the man kidnapped the murderer and tortured him for seven days. (Is this the novel “Les Sept Jours du talion” by Patrick Senécal?)

    @abi2828 “(A maidservant) was mistreated by her landlord. (With) time, they fell in love. Finally, they got married and had many children.”

    @LaaayyzzyBoy It's the story of a cowboy who lost his parents when he was younger. (He then spends his entire life (looking for) the murderer.” (In French you can say “passer une vie”. In English it would be “spending his life”.)

    @Meltwit011 “Anna decides to live in New York. (She) falls in love with an American but their love was impossible and forbidden because (they) both (were) married.”

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  67. #cuckoografik Nice job on the mini-stories everyone! Just a few suggestions:

    @Mikee2704 Short story: A woman (was) hit by a car at 100km/h and she (ended) up with zero injuries.

    @misachan12 He never realized that she was sick. He caused her pain without knowing (it). When he finally came around, it was already (too) late

    @n3fr3t93 You know the night is (gray) without you. I can't sleep (and) mornings don't show the light. I'm crying (now) because I love you so much.

    @Unitedspace25 (It’s) the story of people who watch crisis and (problems). (T)hey are worried and complain and (yet), (what do they) do about it? ... Nothing.”

    @n3fr3t93 He saw a beautiful girl and he (fell) in love. (H)e bought flowers, (a) necklace and (a) ring but (it did not win her over). Louis (killed) himself. (The expression “win her over” means to “succeed in gaining the favour or support of a person”. Is this what you meant?)

    @roufibella (A) mouse (ran) out of her hole (noiselessly). (She) quickly crossed the (kitchen) to find (something) to nourish her child but the cat (ate) her.” (The adjective “noiselessly” means not making any noise.)

    @shootop A teenager gets lost in the woods. (He) finds a temple of the shogun era. A priest asks him to (sit) near the coffin. The coffin (swallows) him. (You could also say “take a seat”.)

    @mihullers (She) plays the piano softly. She (makes a mistake) and her master (shouts at) her. She (barely breathes). She decides to continue. (He) apologizes (and) she smiles. (Because you don’t say what she fails at specifically, it is better to say she makes a mistake. It is more general.)

    @abi2828 Death comes around and goes around. She has no (friends) but a lot of enemies. She loves everyone but (nobody) cares about her :)

    @sarareine (One) night (I) went with my friends (to) a feast of culture. (I saw a) boy. (When I talked) with him, I (discovered he) is my friend on (Facebook). (I’m not usre what you mean by “feast of culture”? Do you mean a cultural feast? A fest put on by a cultural organization?)

    @ shawtyyheart “I had been deeply in love with him (since) kindergarten. However, he didn't know. In the end, I found out that I was only a sister to him. </3

    @ samyy_o (While I was talking with) my friends, I moved (backwards). I fell on a small (snowbank). My friend helped me to stand up and I almost fell on him too.” (Did you mean to say “banc de neige”?)

    @dalhiaaihlad “From morning till evening (when I am on holidays), I am looking for something to do, because vacations (bore) me.”

    @khadieJunita “A man who was unfaithful, always (said) that he (was) at a meeting. One day, his wife followed him and saw him with another woman. She (divorced him).”

    @alexzarzour “(This) story is about Antoine. Antoine lived alone all his life. (One day) he won a lot of money and now he's the most popular guy.” (“One day” means it happened already; “someday” means it will happen in the future.)

    @dalhiaaihlad His wife was kidnapped and killed. David is accused of being the culprit. (He) will seek by all means (possible) to prove (that he is innocent).

    Please correct or rewrite your tweets and retweet everyone. Wonderful work!!

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  68. #regeenie619

    @mysweetcherry From the first moment they saw each other, they felt a desire and before they knew it, they fell in love. A story about a forbidden love.


    C'est beau ! Est-ce que tu connais le nom d'histoire ?

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  69. #regeenie619

    @samyy_o I would like that I just need to raise my hands and get the moon easily for keep it like if it's an important gift.

    You may want to write your poem like this:

    I would like that. I just need to raise my hands and capture the moon for me to keep, like an important gift.

    Good Job!

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  70. #regeenie619

    @KuroHoshi3107 My book tells a story about a child sold by her parents to a district of slavery. To escape the miserable life in Japan she'll become Geisha


    Comment: Ton livre est familier. Est-ce que le nom ton livre est "The Memoirs of a Geisha"?

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  71. #regeenie619

    @ameni_164_tn I walk on the sand the heat is scorching the sea beyond me smiling birds flying all day summer is finally back


    J'aime ton poème et aussi je pense que l'été est la meilleure saison.

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  72. #sbassan93 @jane_172 "One day a guy go out with his car and he accidentally struck a woman. She was at the hospital and he visited her and became good friends." C'est une histoire avec un bon résultat!

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  73. #sbassan93 @LaaayyzzyBoy "It's the story of a cowboy who lost his parents when he was younger than he pasts his entire life to find the murderer." Le cowboy est très détermineé!

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  74. #sbassan93 @Mikee2704 "Short story: A woman got hit by a car at 100km/h and she end up with zero injuries." Elle est une femme très chanceuse!

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  75. #echen94
    @LaaayyzzyBoy It's the story of a cowboy who lost his parents when he was younger than he pasts his entire life to find the murderer.
    Than vs then:
    than = compare
    then = puis
    Use commits instead of pasts, it's like his goal right?

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  76. #VivianCheung @futureboatdrive "The snow is felted... the green putted out the white... my hearth feel this frozen breath forever... i want the winter back." It should be "The snow is felt... the green is covered by the white... my heart feels this frozen breath forever... I want winter back."

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  77. @DreamJeny "Saw him in youtube, i liked his music. I started to learn and fall in love with his songs, so i became his fan" Oui, il y a beaucoup de gens talentueux sur youtube (: #Sisi

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  78. #VivianCheung @HuangDHuang J'aime votre haiku!

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  79. #sbassan93 @abi2828 "Maidservant was mistreated by her landlord. Whit time, they fell in love. Finally, they got married and had many children." In this tweet, we would say, "A maidservant was mistreated by her landlord. With time, they fell in love. Finally, they got married and had many children." "Maidservant" would become "A maidservant" and "Whit" would become "with."

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  80. #VivianCheung @kaze1314 J'aime McDonald's aussi!

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  81. #jennyychan @Djboss23 The first time I saw this girl i said it's real The second time I saw this girl i said i love her The third time I saw this girl got married.


    J'aime ton l'histoire!

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  82. @GuerlensRF "At 26th december I always cook turkey. My mother and i made the dish and my brothers did the housework. My father slept until that" Haha, mon père ne fait rien aussi... mais, de temps en temps il va au supermarché pour acheter la dinde (: #Sisi

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  83. #lasophiale @alexzarzour Oh la la, j'aime votre mini-récit beaucoup! c'est très romantique!

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  84. #VivianCheung @shootop Vos mini-récits font peur!

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  85. @Kaze1314 "I have no money in my wallet, but I'm hungry. Then I find 5$ on the street, so I go to eat McDonald's. And now I'm feeling better.

    It should be:
    I have no money in my wallet, but I'm hungry. I found $5 on the sground, so I went to eat McDonald's, and now I'm feeling better.

    good job :)

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  86. @KuroHoshi3107 Snow crying Sun smiling Students tweeting Me singing

    Ton poème est génial!

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  87. @YoussefBene Haiku : If I could just forget Things you did to me The person I thought you were Maybe I'd live better

    J'adore ton haiku!

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  88. #sophiale @ameni_164_tn j'aime l'été beaucoup!

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  89. @Kaze1314 "I have no money in my wallet, but I'm hungry. Then I find 5$ on the street, so I go to eat McDonald's. And now I'm feeling better." J'aime McDonalds beaucoup! C'est le meilleur (: #Sisi

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  90. simplicityQ LE JOUEUR : A slave played at the casino and became a richman. He won the money for a girl that he try to get over and over again .

    Ton histoire est très inspirant. :)

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  91. @DreamJeny #mullover_elide Je toujours adore un histoire des gens qui ascendent au fortitude.

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  92. #e_rnestli @Dydy_F "My name is Felicia I did my biggest fight with Cancer." should be "My name is Felicia and I had my biggest fight with Cancer." This is because you don't do cancer, you have cancer. "Cancer controled my body.And it sent me in paradise.I'm at peace and I won this fight." should be "Cancer controlled my body and it sent me to paradise.I'm at peace and I won this fight." You shouldn't begin a sentence with "and".

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  93. @simplicityQ

    "Today, I woke up and my bottle of water was empty.I raged and went to the store to get a new bottle.Unfortunately, they were out of stock."

    Quel dommage!

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  94. #jennyychan @n3fr3t93 He saw a beautiful girl and he fail in love. he bought flowers, necklace and ring but she didin't won this guy and Louis kill himself.

    It should be He saw a beautiful girl and fell in love with her. He bought her flowers, necklace and a ring, but she didn't like this guy so he killed himself.

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  95. @Mikee2704 Short story: A woman got hit by a car at 100km/h and she end up with zero injuries.

    Correction; A woman got hit by a car at 100km/h and ended up with no injuries.

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  96. #lasophiale @HuangDHuang "Leaves start changing colour And they fall down one by one As day passes by more and more gather Soon all will disapear" should be "Leaves start changing colour, And they fall down one by one, As the day passes by, more and more gather, soon all will disappear."

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  97. #nixonkwok

    @shootop A man finds his daughter dead body in front of her school. To get revenge, the man kidnapped the murderer and tortured him for seven days.
    -Ce récit est effrayant!

    @futureboatdrive The book speaks about the life of a student and a joker during the middle-age in France. In this book, we learned a lot of secret from past.
    -Qu'est-ce que c'est le titre de le livre?

    @LaaayyzzyBoy A women has been hit by a car. The emergency brought her to the hospital. When she finally arrived there, she died a few minutes after.
    -J'ai espéré pour une conclusion heureux!

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  98. @tranemil #mullover_elide C'est tragique, j'espere que ca ne se passera a moi

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  99. @BiigJoo Penner with Kings, sounds like good playoffs for me !

    Est-ce que tu joues d'hockey sur glace??

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  100. @Meltwit011 #andrewchen123 "Anna decides to live in New York,she falls in love with an American but their love was impossible and forbidden because the both was married" First of all, the comma in the sentence should be a period since they are 2 separate ideas. Also, it shouldnt be "the both was married", instead of "the" you should replace it with "they". Since both is pluaral, you should change "was" to "were"

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  101. #echen94
    @ameni_164_tn Cinderella suffered all her life with her stepmother. Thanks to the fairy, she met the prince at a ball and he decided to marry her.
    Bravo! il n'y a pas des erreur et l'histoire est simple :)

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  102. @dalhiaaihlad #mullover_elide trop mal! j'adore les vacations, tu devrais aller aux places mieux

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  103. @roufibella "the color of the sky makes me want to fly like a bird in the sky the trees are so green like a parade in the other world make me stunned" Hey (: Cool poem! Just a little correction and something to make things flow more... Instead of saying "mak(ing)me stunned" you could change it to "stunning me". That way, the poem will flow along more nicely. #Sisi

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  104. #regeenie619
    @DreamJeny The story is about the spook's apprentice. The apprentice learned and fought hard to become the best of all spooks

    qu'est-ce que spook en anglais?

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  105. #happyoctopi

    @mihullers
    C'est un mini-récit très beau. Je l'adore! Je joue du piano aussi et je pense que cette histoire est fantastique.

    @LaaayyzzyBoy
    Ah, ton mini-récit est très triste! Pourquoi est-ce qu'elle ne vive pas?

    @OtakuSignal
    Pourquoi est-ce que le royaume était en danger?

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  106. #happyoctopi
    @GuerlensRF At 26th december I always cook turkey. My mother and i made the dish and my brothers did the housework. My father slept until that

    For dates, you usually use "on" instead of "at." Also, "made" and "did" are in the past tense, but you're saying here that you 'always cook turkey,' which is an ongoing action. "My father slept until that" is unclear. When is 'that'? It might be either 'until we begin cooking' or 'until the turkey is ready.'

    Therefore, this should go something like this:

    I always cook turkey on December 26th. My mother and I make the dish and my brothers do the housework. My father sleeps until we begin cooking/ the turkey is ready.

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